Read the news release through quickly and put it aside.

What, in your own words, is this paper's thesis statement?

Re-read the draft again more carefully and answer the following questions either in the margins or on the back of the last page.

Organization--Explain in your own words the logic behind the arrangement of paragraphs in this paper. Then, explain how your classmate could make this logic clearer. Look closely at transitions between paragraphs and indicate those that are more effective and those that could use some work.

Evidence--Examine your classmate's use of support from other texts. For each source, explain whether your classmate agrees or disagrees and how he or she adds an insight to the thesis that is not already in one of the source texts.

Introduction--What information is already in the introduction? What would add to or take away to make it a stronger introduction?

Conclusion--Does the ending sound conclusive? How would you change it to make it more conclusive?

Questions--Write at least one question in response to this paper.

Be sure to sign each draft that you edit.